Question

tem alguma coisa errada nesse texto que eu traduzi?, por favor me ajudem

Hello, very much hope that you read this text, it means a lot to me!

Ashton, you are a very special person in my life, his words, his way of thinking about society and simply beautiful, make me grow more and more, when I was watching The new broken scene live and you talked about that speech, I rang and I stopped to think how he cares about us, it helped me a lot, I love technology, I thought I'd create a project to encourage more teenagers to technology, it gave me the strength to fight, I just have to thank to you for providing this care and love that you have for the fans, thank you very much.


You will change completely my life my way of thinking of how to deal with the problems, I was a shy person did not know me interact with people was stuck in myself when I listened to the songs of the band so easy to me better, I feel good , give so I wanted to write a text to thank you but also the band for providing joy and good music for us. I fell more in music when I met your work, dedication to provide music that can bring us back, we can feel good to hear them, you taught me that no matter what your personality, religion, race, all the we have to respect each other, the music brings me comfort, it's great to see bands growing up and having expirations through you, I feel so proud about it, I see several covers on youtube with bands growing up with the influence of you, and thinking that you were covers on youtube and are now playing around the world, this band means a lot not only for me but for many, thank you for everything!

"WE ARE KINGS AND QUEENS OF NEW GENERATION, WE ARE WELL WITH IT" – 5 SECONDS OF SUMMER

Answer 1

Oi!
Tente substituir assim:
Hello, I really hope you read this text, it means a lot to me!
Eu vi que como você vai escrever o texto para o Ashton do 5sos, vc precisa substituir esses "his" e "he" por "Your" e "You"
Espero muito ter ajudado x

Answer 2

Olá espero muito que você leia este texto isso significa muito para mim. A Shatom Você é uma pessoa muito especial na minha vida. Suas palavras sua maneira de pensar sobre a sociedade e simplesmente lindo. Me faz crescer mais e mais. Quando eu estava assistindo a nova cena quebrado viver e você falou que o discurso eu também toquei e eu parei para pensar como ele w preoxupa conosco. Ele me ajudou muito .Eu amo a tecnologia. Eu pensei que iria criar um projeto para incentivar mais adolescentes a tecnologia. Ela me deu a força para lutar. Eu só tenho a a agradecer .Todos