Alguém pode-me corrigir? E podem-me dar dicas para escrever textos
One of the things that worries people most nowadays is the way that they look. In the past few decades, fashion has been improving and even changing the way that people think about clothing. For that reason some people judge others just because they dress different.
First, we ought stop creating thoughts about a person that we have seen for the first time. Besides the most important thing in a person is the personality and beyond that we should never judge a book by its cover. So I do not believe that appearance is much important as personality.
Second, the price of clothes is surprising because there are some pieces of cloth that are ridiculous. And there are many people that buy it just to look rich or to impress other people instead of buying simple clothes for way cheaper.
In conclusion, I agree with it and I believe that if we do not care to much about our appearance it can make us fell better and more confident..
Respostas
Resposta:
One of the things that worries people most nowadays is the way that they look. In the past few decades, fashion has been improving and even changing the way that people think about clothing. Therefore some people judge others just because they dress different.
First, we ought stop creating thoughts about a person who we have seen for the first time. Although we should know the most important thing in a person is the personality and beyond that we should never judge a book by the cover. So I do not believe appearance is as important as personality.
Second, the price of clothes is astonishing ,because there are some pieces of clothes so much ridiculous. And there are many people that buy it just to look rich or to impress other people instead buying simple clothes which is much cheaper and sometimes more beautiful.
In conclusion, I agree with this and I believe that if we don't care too much about our appearance, it can make us feel better and more confident.
Explicação: Tentei ,eu ainda estou aprendendo para ser fluente ,então qualquer erro me perdoe. Na hora de escrever vc poderia procurar palavras diferentes e que venham fazer mais sentido ao texto, a forma que vc escreveu ta muito bom, porm tem erros de gramatica e palavras que as vezes se repetem de uma forma que n deveria repetir. O vocabulário é muito bom, só na hora de que for colocar as palavras vê as traduções e significados também. Google tradutor não é confiavel.